Help fix the Story Please please

Here is the link to picture http://stephensonmusic.com/wp-content/uploads/2014/03/Another-Place-Another-Time-image.jpg of the story i wrote the story is based on the picture. you guys you have to correct the story and add the things if needed please help me.

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